Everybody are interested in famous people or has a dream of being a famous celebrity; having cost clothes, a penthouse, signing autographs and a famous relationship. But, who said being famous was always fun?
The main advantage is that everybody knows them. So, they have so much fans, people admire them and want to be like them, and they are rich. Another advantage is that they can make a contribution to society or they can be ambitious. For example, when people helps to somebody who hasn’t got anything to eat or they spend money on food to make videos about how they have a food fight. In addition, they have a lot of followers on Twitter, Instagram and Snapchat.
On the other hand, there also some important disadvantages. Because famous people can’t lead lives of normal people or can attract stalkers that become obsessed. Although they feel good when they are somebody’s, but they don’t have any privacity when they go out and the paparazzis are following them all the time.
To sum up, being famous is difficult, but those who get the opportunity, it is because they really want it.
Hey Narela, here are some suggestions from my side. The essay was quite informal kind of conversation. You need to revise writing the sentences completely not half broken. Keep writing and I hope my editing will help you get an idea.
Everybody is …….. becoming a famous celebrity….expensive clothes,………famous relationship. (What you mean by this?)
… advantage is the recognition they earn worldwide.. People admire ……. They can be ambitious and can contribute towards the uplifting of the society as they got the power and money to make the things happen in their favor. For example, they help the homeless and below poverty line families by fighting against social causes. …………
…….. They are not allowed to lead a simple life like a common man because of numerous fan following and paparazzo. Though it makes them feel good to be a celebrity but on the same side, they are not allowed to live an ordinary life which brings peace.
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Having said that, please find my suggestions below;
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There you have it Narela, overall the essay is written in a way that a reviewer can understand and quiet frankly, I have to rephrase almost each and every sentence that you created, this is because, you are not paying attention to the sentence construction. Now, don’t get me wrong, I know that you are trying your best and you are in the right category and determination as well as the will to learn and practice the language is the right course to make sure that you will get better if not the best at this craft.
Hello Narela, your text needs a considerable rectification, here are my suggestions/corrections/explanations:
Everybody is interested in famous people or has a dream of being a famous celebrity(you mustn’t use the collocation famous celebrity, because it’s tautologous — the word celebrity means a famous living person) ; having clothes produced by luxury fashion brands […] and a famous relationshipgetting acquainted with influential people. […]
On the one hand, there are many advantages of being a celebrity, the main of them — everybody knows them. So, they have muchmany fans all around the world […]. Another advantage is that they can make a substantial contribution to solving social problems: for example, by making videos to draw public attention to current social issues.For example, when people helps to somebody who hasn’t got anything to eat or they spend money on food to make videos about how they have a food fight. […]
On the other hand, there are also some important disadvantages: Because celebrities can’t lead lives of normalordinary people, […]. Although they feel good when they are somebody’s , being persons of figure , but they don’t have any privacityprivacy when they go out and the paparazzis(plural noun form)hound them all the time.
[…], but those who get the opportunity, it is because they really want it.so only those who agree to put up with the downsides of living a life of celebrity use such an opportunity if they get it.
I highly recommend you to improve your level of English.
Regards.
Being a celebrity: a dream or a nightmare?
Generally, fame is usually considered as a source of power and quality life. From the fans perspective, it’s their fancy, their dearest aim to replicate their stars’ clothing and everyday actions to feel satisfaction. Nevertheless, some still reckon that celebrity can be a true nightmare due to many factors. So, the real question is how can fame made people miserable rather than giving them the perfect taste of a cozy life?
In fact, when it comes down to famous people, we all keen on the bright and sensational part of their lives: the expensive cars, hot chicks, unique penthouses. They’re wanted for pictures, signing autographs and even hand shakes by fans who take their stars as idols and real success examples. They’re followed insanely on social media and their comments or pictures are considered red-hot news that shortly go viral. Thus, these ordinary people, who achieved progress, especially actors and singers, are utterly followed, admired and worshiped by others. From my perspective, I think, when doing their jobs, celebrities are more likely to enjoy gusty moments, yet, as fans can be genuinely rigid, fame can give some headaches regarding personal life.
Logically, celebrities hold a reputation that they’re not willing to ruin, as a matter of fact they want appear to the crowd the way they plan to avoid embarrassing moments, hereupon, being followed by nosy people is frustrating. Let me break down for you, for instance, a famous person is actually an ordinary human being who have needs like sleeping peacefully, enjoying some privacy at home and meeting personal friends who doesn’t want to get involved in «fame life». So, his life could be corrupted by getting seen in uncomfortable positions because there are people whose duty is to follow famous people and get them anguished by selling pictures of celebrities to magazines to give people a glance at their idols’ personal life. Apparently, the paparazzi, who I was talking about, seems to be a true nightmare for them. Sometimes, the facts or the pictures revealed are far too dangerous or embarrassing that celebrities could accept giving away their reputation to get saved from the shame. Facts like getting proof of a singer taking drugs or pictures showing an actor having desperate needs that make them a pedophile can be counted as cases that ruined famous people’s lives heretofore.
Taking a closer look on both sides of celebrity life, I find that fame is just a mis-behavioral chain reaction that led a totally successful and respected person into the hurricane of social media. Despite, what it has as advantages, it has severe stains on the famous people’s psychological health and well-being. So, living with success as a dark horse is definitely a permanent solution; you’re respected, loved but ultimately flying off the nosy people’s radar.
To sum up, whether you’re in the shadows or known by everyone around you, you need to make sure to make the right decisions to avoid people’s attention or to put a space between your job and your privacy in order to have quiet as any human being needs.
Your essay is well crafted but there are a few things that you need to elaborate on. Things like in what other ways do the fans envy celebrities? How do the celebrities deal with the pressures that come from fame?
Hi Akkari, welcome to EssayForum 🙂 With regards to your essay, I would like to point out some of your weaknesses in order to strengthen your essay later on. I hope you can find it helpful towards your essay-writing skill development. Now, you can see the detailed descriptions of your weaknesses and some suggestions below.
— In academic essay, it is not recommended to use contraction(s) like «They’re, it’s, you’re…». You should make those in proper format, such as «they are, it is, you are..». Using contraction(s) only make your essay becomes less formal or less academic.
— Cambridge academic writing skill book said that in academic essay you also need to avoid using coordinating conjunctions in the beginning of the sentence. The coordinating conjunctions are FANBOYS (For, And, Nor, But, Or, Yet, So). Using one of these in the beginning of the sentence will also make your essay becomes less academic. I have seen that you have used «So» several times, and therefore you can use «Thus/Hence/As a result» instead of «So».
— Personal pronouns should also be avoided in academic essay. You have used them too much. Perhaps, «we» can be replaced by «people», and «you» can also be substituted by «people». Switching from first or two person to third person point of view is necessary.
— Avoid stating informal words or phrase such as «hot chicks». You cannot expect older people or even your teacher will consider this as proper words. This phrase can only be seen on American movies not in written format.
Those are my contributions relating to how to write an essay academically. However, if your writing was not related to an academic essay, you can just ignore all of the suggestions above. I did focusing on academic point of view because I think your essay’s content is related to that. Good luck in revising this essay 🙂
Hi!
Maybe you could replace ‘so’ as ‘therefore’ in this sentence.
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Hi Majd, I hope to provide you further enhancement for your essay.
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Overall, it is a well written essay, you are creative in expressing your opinion towards the subject at hand and I hope the above corrections strengthen the essay even more.
The number of people who want to be famous themselves has increased. In the past, children and teenagers used to like having more toys or more friends to enjoy the evenings with on vacation. Nowadays, they want to have followers, influence people in their lifestyles, and come up with a new trend. The internet opened many doors as we have a lot of possibilities. We can be anywhere in any moment in addition to having a lot of new employment, for example, Youtubers, Personal Bloggers, Web Designers, Lifestyle consultants, etc.
The main advantage of being a digital influencer is to earn money for pleasure, most people talk about what they like or common topics. Another advantage is you can work comfortably in your home, in your office, or anywhere you are. Furthermore you don’t need so much investment in the beginning of your business.
On the other hand, when they decide to be famous, they need to bear in mind that they can have a better income, they can travel a lot, they can visit a lot of places and they can get to know people even richer than them, all these things in exchange to freedom, you expose yourself so much. In addition, you will have a lot of people who really like you and other that hate you even without knowing you or your job.
To sum up, to be a digital influencer have both advantages and disadvantages. You only need to be what you are. It is necessary to talk about what you believe, indicate products not only for the sake of advertising but rather because you use and recommend them, etc. Your credibility will be built by you.
Nowadays, the term ‘celebrity’ term is more associated with televisions or Hollywood stars than the rest of famous or well-known person people. For example, you can be a very good lawyer, like Amal Alamuddin, and you can be a well-known person in your profession, but you aren’t a celebrity until you get married with to George Clooney. What is clear is that being a celebrity could be a dream or a nightmare.
Firstly, when you are a famous person you have, almost always, a lot of money and you are allowed to travel around the world. In addition, you can take part in social activism. For example, Emma Watson fights for gender equality. But the main advantage of being a celebrity is that you do what you want to do.
On the other hand, you’ve lost your privacy, and this includes that the people will want to take photos with you in a restaurant or in the cinema queue. Another disadvantage is that perhaps your close friends aren’t such a good friends and they go out with you about because of your fame.
To sum up, I would say that be a celebrity could be great. However, you can forget about what kind of famous person you want to be. Are you a Jersey Shore start or the next Marie Curie?
Bien escrito.
My comments in red are corrections. My comments in blue/gray are suggestions to sound more natural.
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Being a celebrity: a dream or a nightmare?
Generally, fame is usually considered as a source of power and quality life. From the fans perspective, it’s their fancy, their dearest aim to replicate their stars’ clothing and everyday actions to feel satisfaction. Nevertheless, some still reckon that celebrity can be a true nightmare due to many factors. So, the real question is how can fame made people miserable rather than giving them the perfect taste of a cozy life?
In fact, when it comes down to famous people, we all keen on the bright and sensational part of their lives: the expensive cars, hot chicks, unique penthouses. They’re wanted for pictures, signing autographs and even hand shakes by fans who take their stars as idols and real success examples. They’re followed insanely on social media and their comments or pictures are considered red-hot news that shortly go viral. Thus, these ordinary people, who achieved progress, especially actors and singers, are utterly followed, admired and worshiped by others. From my perspective, I think, when doing their jobs, celebrities are more likely to enjoy gusty moments, yet, as fans can be genuinely rigid, fame can give some headaches regarding personal life.
Logically, celebrities hold a reputation that they’re not willing to ruin, as a matter of fact they want appear to the crowd the way they plan to avoid embarrassing moments, hereupon, being followed by nosy people is frustrating. Let me break down for you, for instance, a famous person is actually an ordinary human being who have needs like sleeping peacefully, enjoying some privacy at home and meeting personal friends who doesn’t want to get involved in «fame life». So, his life could be corrupted by getting seen in uncomfortable positions because there are people whose duty is to follow famous people and get them anguished by selling pictures of celebrities to magazines to give people a glance at their idols’ personal life. Apparently, the paparazzi, who I was talking about, seems to be a true nightmare for them. Sometimes, the facts or the pictures revealed are far too dangerous or embarrassing that celebrities could accept giving away their reputation to get saved from the shame. Facts like getting proof of a singer taking drugs or pictures showing an actor having desperate needs that make them a pedophile can be counted as cases that ruined famous people’s lives heretofore.
Taking a closer look on both sides of celebrity life, I find that fame is just a mis-behavioral chain reaction that led a totally successful and respected person into the hurricane of social media. Despite, what it has as advantages, it has severe stains on the famous people’s psychological health and well-being. So, living with success as a dark horse is definitely a permanent solution; you’re respected, loved but ultimately flying off the nosy people’s radar.
To sum up, whether you’re in the shadows or known by everyone around you, you need to make sure to make the right decisions to avoid people’s attention or to put a space between your job and your privacy in order to have quiet as any human being needs.
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IELTS essay Everybody are interested in famous people or has a dream of being a famous celebrity; having cost clothes, a penthouse, signing autographs and a famous relationship. But, who said being famous was always fun?
A dream of children is to be a celebrity in the future. For example, boys want to be a baseball player or a soccer player, and girls want to be an actress or a pianist. They want to succeed and be celebrities.
The advantages of being a celebrity are they can be self-confident and satisfied. In addition, they can have more possibility to have good friends, a nice house and a good life.
Although there are some disadvantages as well. It would be difficult to have privacy. Because of SNS, it is more difficult than before. They have to think everybody is a spy. In addition, people want to ask them many things. For example, donations, rent money or to introduce friends. Sometimes they are in trouble. However, it is still a dream to be a celebrity. The life is only once. It is a pity to regret not doing the work for a dream, and it is worth it to make an effort to be a celebrity.
To sum up, working hard for the dream is making the life fruitful.
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IELTS Writing Task 2/ IELTS Essay:
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Being a celebrity — such as famous film star or sports personality — brings problems as well as benefits.
Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
Sample Answer 1:
A celebrity works hard to get the attention of the public and once s/he becomes famous, s/he constantly tries to avoid the attention. Being a celebrity is certainly not a piece of cake. They get all the attention of the world at the price of personal space. It is a debatable topic whether being a famous personality is a blessing or a punishment.
Firstly, let us look at the negative side of being a celebrity. As the majority of the world follows the film starts or the sports persons, few of them are crazy about the celebrity. For instance, in the headlines of few newspapers, we keep reading about the fans who write a letter by their blood. I am certain that no one would like to receive such letters, constant annoying calls or being stalked by strangers. These all scary things come with the tag celebrity. Moreover being a celebrity is not an easy job. The film starts and sportsman has to continuously perform well otherwise same fans would harm them. For example, when the Indian cricket team did not perform well in one of the matches, their fans broke the cricketers’ houses.
There are always two sides of the coin. Everybody wants to be a special person. Many people dream to become a celebrity so I am confident that the celebrity status must be giving a lot of advantages. One of the biggest benefits is the money. Celebrities make a lot of money compared to other people. It is known that a supermodel earns more than a school teacher. Moreover, anyone can become a celebrity. For instance, no academic degree is required to become a film star or a sportsperson. Sometimes, the film stars get a chance to shoot in foreign countries or play in different locations. So it’s a great combination of holidays and work. The kind of glamour and publicity received by them is hard to imagine for a common man.
I believe that being the role model for someone is the biggest achievement of a human life and being a celebrity gives a chance to be one.
[ by — Naaz ]
Sample Answer 2:
Almost everything has two sides – positive and negative; being a celebrity is not different. Sometimes it is good and sometimes is not, what makes a difference is the way they deal with it.
I am not a celebrity; however, I can see the pros and cons of being one. I believe that famous people suffer a lot because they do not have «peace» in their life. Most of the celebrities do not have a social life, for example, if they go out with friends and family, they are followed by people who want to take pictures of them to sell to magazines and internet blogs. On the other hand, famous people have a lot of money to spend in what way they want. They always have the best clothes, shoes, bags and also the most expensive stuff. They spend a lot of money travelling to others countries and having fun. Additional to that, a lot of people want to be like of them. I heard that there are some people who even do plastic surgery to seem like their favourite actress or actor.
In my opinion, I believe that being a famous person bring more cons than pros. I think everyone deserves a good social life, in another word, going out and having fun without being followed or appearing on the front page of a gossip magazine or a blog.
Overall, celebrities like an actress, actor, singer and sports personality, likes to be famous, otherwise, they would not choose this kind of job and occupations. More than that, I believe that they are used with this kind of life.
[ by — Mariza Ichiy ]
Sample Answer 3:
People often believe that brightness and success provide them with advantages and drawbacks as well. I strongly Support the idea that the positive part outweighs the negative ones.
On the one hand, being a film star or a bright sportsman lead people to be well known, loved and have a lot of people attracted to them. They also find themselves to be admired and respected by a numerous group of their societies and sometimes from around the world. For instance, a film star would be successful and be well-paid besides being internationally famous and revered. Another example is about sports people who are always appreciated for their fulfilment since they lead their team to be well known and win many prizes from different competitive games.
On the other hand, celebrities find themselves under the microscope as they are always followed by the press and paparazzi that make them feel insecure and under stress. What’s more, celebrities might get worried about misleading media which sometimes could be harmful to their successful history. A typical example, when wrong news or a misunderstanding for a conversation to the press is published, rumours spread like the wind. Hence, they sometimes would rather stay away from the media in order to keep them secured and not to worry about being bothered by people even though they feel admired by some fans.
To sum up, being famous and successful is like a sword having two sharp edges that we cannot escape. However, celebrities should get the most of their position and always consider the disadvantages.
[ by — Naji Lichaa ]
Sample Answer 4:
Almost every human on planet earth has a dream of being a famous celebrity. One has to follow a punishing routine in order to get success. We will explore pros and cons of being a famous person.
The most rewarding outcome of being a celebrity is fame. Fans adore and worship their celebrity like a god. Wherever you go, people recognise you and you get unrestricted access to almost everything at your disposal. Looking at another side of the coin, fame also creates inconveniences. Wherever you go, people recognise you and try to pose with you and get your autograph. As up the ladder of fame you go, less private life you have.
Next, the most precious thing is respect. People respect and treat you as a role model. People and press follow actions of you and monitor even slightest move, you make. You can be an inspiration to millions of people, which is an outstanding experience. At the same time, you have to be very cautious with your public and private behaviour. Respect comes with a high sense of responsibility and dignity.
Monetary gain is another bright side with achieving success. Successful people earn millions of dollars with each assignment and can get everything, which money can buy. On the darker side, they need to maintain the money wisely so that at the end of career they have sufficient money to live a respectful life. For instance, a famous Indian actress like Saira Bano is currently living in poverty after having a successful career.
In conclusion being a famous celebrity has both pros and cons. It is a gift which a few people get out of millions. With a little inconvenience, I think it has more benefits than troubles.
[ by — Pankaj Jain ]
When we were children, some of us would like to be singers, actress etc. We don’t think how really famous people feel themselves.
Of course, there are some advantages of being a top-liner. The main advantage that this job is well-paid. In our days all world revolve around money and all bonuses you will have if somebody knows that you are a rich person. For example, a gold card have a lot of bonuses for their holders. Another advantage is that people give you a lot of presents because you are his idol, but this item has one minus, when all plush toys closed walls of the room, on the other hand this is good warming.
However, there are some important disadvantages. For instance, celebrities don’t have private life. Paparazzi and fans go on their heels every day. In some ways they might be attacked by somebody. The main disadvantage that top-liners often do what they don’t want and say what they don’t want to say.
All things considered, all children need to know that being top-liner isn’t only drinking tee with candies and singing, but a really hard work and incredibly hard life.
